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While writing, there are some aspects you should be careful about, missing information required will take points away. You are getting better at writing; unfortunately, it is not perfect yet. There are some points you forgot; checking the grammar structures can help you make fewer mistakes the next time. Your writing is good. There is always something that can be corrected, but you learned to use the possessive pronouns correctly. Excellent!