You should do something about this! Your ideas are not clear because you need to learn how to use grammar, punctuation and spelling. You also have to keep in mind the objectives of the task you are required. Start now!
Not that good! You had some problems with your structures and the use of verbs. You are able to express but it is not good enough. Practice some reading to increase your vocabulary and also you will get familiar with grammar. Be ready!
Excellent! Good writing and use of ideas. Your spelling was ok and you could use all the elements that were required. Great job!