You are starting to write but there are some aspects you should be careful. Do not forget to answer everything that is asked and mention all the points that are required. Check your grammar knowledge. You are getting better at writings, unfortunately is not perfect yet. There are some points that you are forgetting about and checking the correct use of connectors can help you make less mistakes the next time. Very good! Your writing is now acceptable. There is always something that can be corrected but you are certainly answering what is being asked and you have also paid attention to the topic. Congratulations!